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Topic 1: Tell me about your family
Chào các bạn !
Các bạn cùng viết chủ đề "Tell me about your family" này nhé.
Trong chủ đề này các bạn hãy kể về gia đình mình: gồm mấy người ,tuổi tác ,nghề nghiệp
,tính tình …của từng người ,các bài viết cũng có độ dài như lần trứoc .Chú ý tránh những
lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp mà mình đã nhắc nhở
Có thể bắt đầu là :There are (four) people in my family…..
Một số từ vựng để các bạn tham khảo :
QUAN HỆ GIA ĐÌNH MỘT SỐ NGHỀ :
Grand mother : Bà nội ,ngoại Engineer : kỹ sư
Grand father : ông nội, ngoại Architect : kiến trúc sư
Grand parents : ông bà nurse : y tá
Parents : cha mẹ pilot : phi công
Grand son : cháu nội ,ngoại trai plumber : thợ sửa ống nước
Grand daughter : cháu nội ,ngoại gái carpenter : thợ mộc
father in- law : cha chồng ,vợ Electrician : thợ điện
mother in- law : mẹ chồng ,vợ Director : giám đốc
Daughter : con gái Vice director : phó giám đốc
Son : con trai barber : thợ hớt tóc
Daughter in-law : con dâu Hair dresser : thợ uốn tóc
Son in - law : con rể Manicurist : thợ làm móng
Mother in- law : mẹ chồng , vợ policeman : công an (nam)
Younger sister : em gái butcher : người bán thịt
Younger brother : em trai house wife : nội trợ
Elder sister : chị house maid : người giúp việc nhà
Elder brother : anh trai Journalist : nhà báo
Brother in-law : anh ,em rể singer : ca sĩ
Sister in - law : chị ,em dâu Farmer : nông dân
cousin : anh em họ ( con của cô, dì ,mợ ,thím Tailor : thợ may
..) Goldsmith : thợ bạc
Nephew :cháu trai ( con của anh,chị, em ) Draper : người bán quần áo
Niece :cháu gái ( con của anh ,chị ,em ) Musician : nhạc sĩ
aunt : cô ,dì ,mợ, thím Watchman : bảo vệ
uncle : chú ,bác ,cậu Sale man (woman) : người buôn bán (nữ)
step mother : mẹ kế MỘT SỐ MẪU CÂU ÁP DỤNG :
step son : con riêng (trai) He works as a doctor in Cho ray hospital:
step daughter : con riêng (gái) ông ta làm bác sĩ ở BV Chợ Rẩy
Half brother : anh em cùng cha khác mẹ, At the age of seventy ,my grand father still
cùng mẹ khác cha looks hale : ở tuổi 70 ông tôi trông vẫn còn
Half sister :chị em cùng cha khác mẹ ,cùng tráng kiện
mẹ khác cha
Bài viết của thanhphuong882002
My family have four persons, my mother, my father, my brother and me. Both my mother and my father
are a teacher. She is teaching in high school. She teaches chemistry. She is a gentle and righteous mother.
She is interested in her children's studying.She always gives me some useful advice in my life. My father
isn't teach, he work as an officer in the primary school. He is very strict. He always complains when my
brother and me make a mistake.My parents are both the same age, 49 years ọld My brother is a
student.He is 22 years old.He has just left school. Now, he is finding his job. His speciality is enviroment
science.He is very friendly and kind .Finally , i am a student. I am 19 years old. I am outgoing and have
my ambition.This is some information about my family.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
My family have has four persons people , my mother, my father, my brother and me. Both of my mother
and my father parents are a teacherteachers
cha mẹ số nhiều phải thêm s vào teacher
. She is teaching My mother teaches in a high school. She teaches chemistry.
Hai câu này nên tóm lại là :
My mother teaches chemistry in a high school.
She is a gentle and righteous mother. She is interested in her children's studying always concerned
about our study
be interested in : thích
be concerned about : quan tâm, lo lắng
.She always gives me some useful advice in my life. My father isn't teach, he work works as an officer in
the a primary school. He is very strict. He always complains when my brother and me I make a mistake.
chủ từ phải dùng I
My parents are both the same age, 49 years ọld ; My brother,who is 22 years old, is a student graduate
.He is 22 years old.He has just left school. Now, he is finding looking for his job. His speciality is
environmental science.He is very friendly and kind .Finally , i I am a student. I am 19 years old. I am
outgoing and have my ambition ambitious .This is some information about my family
Student : là sinh viên còn đang học đại học ,còn nếu đã ra trường rồi thì dùng : graduate
find : tìm thấy
looking for : tìm kiếm ( chưa thấy )
Bài viết của Mr ZigZag
My family have five members. That are my father, my morther, my younger sister , my younger
brother and me. My familly lives at Phu Hoa town(Long Xuyên city) I am Phuong, I am 14
years old and I am a pupil. . First, My father is a teacher. Character's him is very happy.
However I am very fear father, but I love father. Next, My mother is noise , she has long hair
and black. Before I go to bed, she usually said :"Sleep well". I love my mother very much. Next,
my youger sister , she is 10 years old and she is excellent pupil of my primary school. From 7- 8
p.m, I usually teach her about exercise. Finally, My younger brother is 4 years old. He is very
much alive. I am very love my familly. With me ,family always is the assured support. If I have
one wish . I will wish " My familly aways is happy."
Bài sửa của wellfrog
My family have five members. That They are my father, my morther, my younger sister , my younger
brother and me. My familly lives at We live in Phu Hoa town(Long Xuyên city) I am My name is
Phuong, I am 14 years old and I am a pupil. . First, My father is a teacher. Character's him is very happy
He is a jovial man . However, I am very fear father fear him very much ,but. I love my father.Next, My
mother is noise talkative , she has long hair and black long black hair . Before I go to bed, she usually
said says :"Sleep well". I love my mother very much. Next, my youger sister , she is 10 years old and she
is an excellent pupil of in my primary school. From 7- to 8 p.m, I usually teach her about some
exercises. Finally, My younger brother is 4 years old. He is very much alive. active I am very love my
familly very much . With For me ,family always is is always the assured a reliable support. If I have
one wish . I will wish " My familly is aways is happy
Giới từ chỉ nơi chốn em nhớ như sau :
-Các nơi chốn nhỏ như : sân bay ,trường học ,khu mua bán .... thì dùng AT
- Các nơi chốn lớn từ làng ,xả , quận ,thành phố ,tỉnh ,thị xả ,nước ... thì dùng IN
I am + tên : chỉ đựoc sử dụng trong văn nói khi giới thiệu trực tiếp ,còn trong văn viết ,không phảo
giới thiệu trực tiếp thì dùng my name is ...
Không phải diễn tả sự việc theo thời gian nên không dùng : first ,second .. .Có thể dùng : the oldest
person in my family ....,hoặc : the first person I want to tell you about is ....
Chữ family chỉ có một chữ "L" thôi em nhé !
Character's him is very happy : chà ! câu này sai nghiêm trọng đây nhé !
thứ nhất đại từ sở hửu không dùng dấu"'s" :
the book's him (sai)
his book ( đúng )
the book of him ( đúng )
thứ hai là " happy " là tính từ chỉ trạng thái nhất thời của con ngừoi chứ không phải để chỉ tính
tình ,muốn nói đến tính tình thì dùng jovial ( tánh tình vui vẽ )
Sau However phải có dẩu phẩy
Fear là động từ ,không dùng với to be
alive : còn sống !
active : hiếu động
like very much : rất thích
không đựoc dùng very like ,vì like là động từ mà very chỉ đứng trước tính từ và trạng từ thôi
Các trạng từ năng diễn như : always ,often ... đặt trứoc động từ thừong ,sau to be
Bài viết của peden
"There are 7 people in my familỵ My father is a good photoghrapher. He is very gentle and
boon. My mother is a home-maker.She cooks very well and she is always caring to everybody in
my family.I have an elder sister ,an elder brother and a younger sister. My younger sister is a
pupil in class 9A1.My brother is a student ,he is studying in HB university.My sister graduated a
pedagogic college last year and now she is applying for a post.Another people is my
grandmother,she is very old but she is still strong-minded. The last one is me. I am in the
eleventh grade and i am not good at English. I feel happy because i have a good home. I love my
family so much".
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal
"There are 7 seven people in my familỵ My father is a good photoghrapher. He is very gentle
and boon. My mother is a home-maker.She cooks very well and she is always caring to about
(We use CARE TO to talk about caring to do sth) everybody in my family.I have an elder
sister ,an elder brother and a younger sister. My younger sister is a pupilstudent in class
9A1.My brother is a student ,he is studying in at HB => Don't use short form in Writing
university.My sister graduated a pedagogic college last year and now . Now she is applying for a
post.Another people person/ member is my grandmother,she is very old but she is still strong-
minded. The last one is me. I am in the eleventh grade and i am not good at English. I feel happy
because i have a good home =>Câu này ko ổn cho lắm. Bạn nên sủa là Happy family. I love
my family so much".
Comment:
Bài viết của bạn khá ok. Nhưng có 1 số điểm cần luư ý:
1. Không được viết tắt trong đoạn văn
2. Không được viết số, mà phải viết chữ
3. ANOTHER + Singular Countable Noun(EG: another person)
4. Không nên dùng ngôn ngữ chat (VD: u =>you)
Bài sửa bổ sung của wellfrog
My sister graduated a pedagogic college => My sister graduated from pedagogic college
I am in the eleventh grade and i am not good at English.
=>Although I am in the eleventh grade ,I am not good at English.
hoặc :I am in the eleventh grade ;however,I am not good at English.
Bài viết của Lê Như Nguyện
There are four people in my family:my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.My family
lives in Nhatrang city.My family has a establishment which makes dry squid and beef.Both my
father and my mother work there.My father is very strict.He likes to talk with his friends in his
free time.My mother is gentle and kind.She cooks very well.She likes listen to classcial
musis.She usually gives us some useful advices when we have problems.My father and my
mother always help the poor people and the oldster.My younger brother is studying at high
school.He is a smart pupil in class.At home,he is a taciturnity people.He likes listen to rock
music and plays games on computer.And the last one is me.I have just graduated from university
for 5 months.I am finding the job now.I feel very happy when I lives in my family.I loves my
family so much.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
There are four people in my family:my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.My family
lives in Nhatrang city.My family has an establishment which makes dry squid and beef.Both of
my father and my mother work there.My father is very strict.He likes to talk with his friends in
his free time.My mother is gentle and kind.She cooks very well.She likes listening to classcial
musis classical music .She usually gives us some useful advices when we have problems.My
father and my mother always help the poor people and the oldster.My younger brother is
studying at high school.He is a smart pupil student in class.At home,he is a taciturnity people.
taciturn man .He likes listening to rock music and plays games on computer.And the last one is
me.I have just graduated from university for 5 months.I am finding looking for thea job now.I
feel very happy when I lives in my family.I loves my family so much
find : tìm thấy
look for : tìm kiếm ( chưa thấy )
Chủ từ là I thì động từ không thêm s nhé
he is a taciturnity people : câu này có hai lỗi sai:
1. a là số ít trong khi people là số nhiều
taciturnity là danh từ phải đổi thành tính từ ( tacitur) để đặt trước danh từ
Học sinh cấp 2 trở lên dùng student
Bài viết của heo con lun
there are six persons in my family,those are parents,three old brothers and me.although they live
in a house but everybody have a different personalitỵ
both father and mother are quiet,the oldest bother is very hot tempered,i always fear him when
he is angry,the orther and me are joillỵ,i love my family,they are friendly with people,we live in
a poor village but we always love together,now i live sofar my family but i have never fogotten
day which i lived beside familỵ
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal
There are six persons people in my family,those .Those =>nên chấm are parents :three old brothers and
me. Although they live in a house but everybody have has a different personalitỵ (=>Ý bạn nói về tính
cách đúng ko? Mình nghĩ bạn nên dùng chữ CHARACTER.). Both father and mother are quiet
reserved .The . The (=> nên chấm)oldest bother is very hot tempered,i .I always fear him when he is
angry .The orther other and me I I are [s][b] joillỵ jolly .I love my family,they are friendly with people
. We live in at a poor village but we always love together each other .Now i I ive sofar far my family
but I have never fogotten never forget the days which i I lived beside familỵ
Comment:
1. Sau khi hết 1 ý, bạn nên chấm. Câu văn bạn hơi dài.
2. Chữ "I"(tôi) luôn luôn viết hoa
3. Chữ đầu câu luôn viết hoa
=> Đây là ý kiến của mình về các lỗi của bạn.
Bài sửa bổ sung của Wellfrog
Although theywe live in a house but, everybody has a different personalitỵ
Đã dùng although thì không dùng but nữa
Gia đình đương bao gồm mình trong đó nên không thể dùng THEY mà phải dùng WE
the orther and me are joillỵ: câu này sai kinh khủng quá :lỗi spelling :
orther-> other
joillỵ -> jollỵ
lỗi cấu trúc :
Đã dùng the others là ý nói tất cã những người còn lại(trong đó có tôi ) ,nên không thể
thêm : and me nữa ,cho nên câu sửa thành :
the others are jolly
those are parents,three old brothers : câu này đổi thành :
They are my parents ,my three elder brothers
Anh chị ,cha mẹ .... khi dùng phải dùng sở hửu phía trước ,còn chữ elder sao bạn không
tham khảo gợi ý của mình ở đề bài topic ?
Bài viết của cadpig17
My family is a normal one with four members: my parents, my younger brother and me. We live
in a small house in Hanoi. My father is a mechanical engineer. He's tough, but he loves us. Some
times he was unfair and made my mother angry. Honestly, I don't like my father very much. I
love my mother. She's gentle and kind. She always solves every trouble in my family without
argueing. Particularly, she's so well at cooking that I wonder how I can learn that from her. The
third member is my little brother. He's twelve years old. He likes only Pokemon games. And the
last one is me. I'm an undergraduate in NEU. My dream is getting a good job and earn a lot of
money. My family is my life, although sometimes I disagree with my father and argue him. And
I know we love each others.
Bài sửa của metooyou
My family is a normal one with four members: my parents, my younger brother and me. We live in a
small house in Hanoi. My father is a mechanical engineer. He's tough, but he loves us. Some times
Sometimes he was unfair and made my mother angry. Honestly, I don't like my father very much. I love
my mother. She's gentle and kind. She always solves every trouble in my family without argueing
arguing. Particularly, she's so well good at cooking that I wonder how I can learn that from her. The third
member is my little brother. He's twelve years old. He likes only Pokemon games. And the last one is me.
I'm an undergraduate in NEU. My dream is getting a good job and earn a lot of money. My family is my
life, although sometimes I disagree with my father and argue him. And I know we love each others.
- Câu này: "Sometimes he was unfair and made my mother angry" đúng nhưng nên sửa lại là:
"Sometimes he is unfair and make my mother angry." Câu này nên để ở thì hiện tại vì miêu tả sự thật,
hành động vẫn diễn ra thường xuyên.
- Nên tránh viết tắt trong văn viết, nên viết "He is tough", không nên "He's tough"
- good at something: giỏi về cái gì đó
Ex: He is good at math.
- to be well at thời điểm nào đó
Ex: She is well at this time.
Bài sửa bổ sung của wellfrog
My dream is getting a good job and earn a lot of money
câu này liên từ and phải nối hai loại từ giống nhau : getting thì phải đi đôi với earning
=> My dream is getting a good job and earning a lot of money
argue him => argue with him
we love each others. => we love one another.
không có each others mà chỉ có each other ,nhưng mà chữ này dùng cho hai đối tượng mà thôi,còn ba đối
tượng trở lên thì dùng one another
Trên đây là những lỗi ngữ pháp ,còn về cách kết hợp các câu của bạn vẫn chưa có sự kết nối liền lạc ,lần
sau nhớ viết cho liền lạc hơn nhé
Bài viết của ourfamily
I have a small family with three members, my husband, my son and I. The first one, my husband
is thirty-one years old, and he is one year older than I am. He is a construction engineer. He likes
his job and tries my best to work. Besides, he also loves our family, so he often helps me do
housework. He is a bright example for my son to follow.
The second one, my son is four years old, and he is learning at a kingdergarten. He is really
stubborn, but he is so lovely, too. He can do some things to take care himself and help us. He
draws quite well, and he likes reading picture books.
Finally, I want to say that I love our family so much. I'm really happy to live with my husband
and my son.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
I have a small family with three members, my husband, my son and I. The first one, my
husband, is thirty-one years old, and he is one year older than I am. He is a construction
engineer. He likes his job and tries my his best to work. Besides, he also loves our family, so he
often helps me do the housework. He is a bright example for my son to follow.
The second one, my son ,is four years old, and he.He is learning at a kingdergarten
kindergarten. He is really stubborn, but he is also so lovely, too. He can do some things to take
care of himself and help us. He draws quite well, and he likes reading picture books.
Finally, I want to say that I love our family so much. I'm really happy to live with my husband
and my son.
Chủ từ nào thì dùng sở hửu của người đó trước chữ best nhé
I try my best
She tries her best
Take care of : chăm sóc
Trong câu The first one, my husband is thirty-one years old
The first one là chủ từ của is, còn my husbandlà đồng cách danh từ (cùng là chủ từ) nên
nhất thiết phải có 2 dấu phẩy phân cách
Cần phân biệt giữa too và also
Too : là cũng (vậy) => giống như ý trước đó
Also : cũng (thêm ý khác ngoài ý trước )
ex:He is nine : anh ta 9 tuổi
I am nine ,too : tôi cũng 9 tuổi ( giống như anh ta : 9 tuổi )
He eats a cake
He also drinks milk (anh ta cũng uống sửa : ngoài ăn bánh còn uống thêm sửa )
- Bài viết khá tốt ,chỉ có một số lỗi nhỏ nêu trên
Bài viết của thanhkha
There are four members in my family: my father, my mother, my sister, my brother and me. I am youngest sister, so
I am happy. My father is 49 years olad.He is a shoesm(thợ giày)…..He is a self-opinionated man but he love them.
My mother is 50years old.she is a house wife . At home my mother takes care of family carefully. All of working
she does. She cooks a meal very delicious. My sister is 28 years old and last year, she have married.She is a
personal assistant. My brother works as a doctor in General hospital.he is very young when he is 25 years old. And I
study grade 11 in Phan Chau Trinh high school. This is the my small family
Bài sửa của Tsuki
- I am the youngest sister, so I am (happy)/ I am always spoiled by the others
So sánh nhất phải đi cùng với the: the + short Adj-est/ the + most + long Adj.
Vì bạn là người nhỏ nhất nên bạn hạnh phúc; chỗ này mình gợi ý thêm động từ spoil; be
spoiled by the others = bạn được nuông chìu bởi những người còn lại trong gia đình hehe
- My father is 49 years oldad.He is a shoesmmaker(thợ giày)…..
- He is a self-opinionated man but he loves themhis family/(all of) us.
Đại từ nhân xưng làm túc từ them ở đây không rõ nghĩa, nếu bạn muốn nói chúng tôi ,vì trong
đó có bạn, thì bạn phải dùng us hoặc all of us; hoặc bạn cũng có thể nói là ông ấy yêu gia đình
của mình: loves his family, nhớ chia động từ cho ngôi thứ 3 số ít.
- .sShe is a house -wife.
Nhớ sau dấu chấm phải viết hoa nha; housewife = homemaker là MỘT danh từ đơn, nó được
viết dính liền nhau chứ không tách ra.
- At home my mother takes care of the/herfamily carefully
Danh từ số ít không đứng riêng lẻ 1 mình, bạn nên thêm mạo từ hoặc tính từ sở hữu vào nha.
- All of working she does. <--
Câu này mình không rõ bạn muốn nói gì, nếu như bạn muốn diễn đạt ý là mẹ mình đã làm hết
công việc nhà bạn có thể viết: She does all the domestic chores (by herself). (nhưng vậy thì
buồn wa', phải có người share việc nhà chứ ha)
- She cooks a meal very delicious meals/ cooks very well
Mẹ nấu những bữa ăn rất ngon chứ mẹ nấu có 1 bữa thôi sao?
- My sister is 28 years old and last year, she have married.
Hành động kết hôn đã xảy ra & đã kết thúc trong quá khứ nên bạn dùng Simple Past, không
dùng Present Perfect; trạng từ last year nên đặt ở phía sau động từ: she married/ got married
last year
- My brother works as a doctor in the General hospital.
General hospital ở đây có nghĩa xác định, dùng mạo từ xác định the đi kèm.
- hHe is very young when he is 25 years old.
Nhớ viết hoa sau dấu chấm câu. Câu này mình hiểu là anh của bạn rất trẻ khi anh í 25 tuổi,
còn bi giờ thì ... (rất già) Nếu đó không phải ý của bạn thì bạn có thể viết là He is 25 (years old)
and he is very young/ He is very young, just/only 25
- And I studyam in eleventh/11th grade 11 in Phan Chau Trinh high school.
Không bắt đầu 1 câu bằng liên từ and. Cái này mình sửa rất nhiều lần rồi mà cũng có bạn bị
sai hoài, be in + ordinal number (số thứ tự) + grade
- This is the my small family --> That is all about my small family.
Nhìn chung bạn còn hay sai nhiều lỗi lặt vặt, lần sau nhớ reread lại bài trước khi gửi nha. Bạn
cũng nên học thêm từ vựng & cấu trúc câu để có thể diễn đạt ý dễ dàng hơn. Chúc nhanh tiến
bộ.
Bài viết của yencuong1981
I have get married for two years . As a result, there are many people in my familly. I have
special respect for my parents. My father is often quick-tempered because he has high blood
pressure over the year. My mother is very beautiful and douce. They have just retired for four
months. My younger brother has just graduated National Economic University. He work as a
accountant of Viettel company. At the same time, he is preparing economical master exams. He
considers as a dynamic person. My parents in law are farmers. Inspite of extremly hard working,
they had brought up their offspring become the learned persons. I’m trying to get on well with
them. My husband is the youngest in his siblings. He is a manufacture director in pharmaceutical
company. He’s good at using tools to fix things or make things. At last, we hope that we will
welcome a new member in the near future.
Bài sửa của Tsuki
- I have getgot married for two years
Pre Perfect: have/has+ Past Part
- (As a result), there are many people in my familly.
As a result được dùng để chỉ hệ quả của hành động xảy ra trước đó; nhưng hành động trước
đó là get married vậy là chỉ thêm có 1 người & không nói rõ là sống chung với gia đình chung
hay sống riêng mà hệ quả là gia đình đông người thì không thuyết phục cho lắm. Mình nghĩ
bạn có thể nói là I got married 2 years ago and since then we have lived with my parents .
As a result, ...
- My father is (often) quick-tempered because he has high blood pressure over the years
quick-tempered là tính từ thể hiện 1 phần tính cách không mang tính tạm thời, cho nên mình
quả thật chưa từng thấy người ta dùng với các trạng từ chỉ tần suất (often, frequently,
usually...). Nếu bạn muốn diễn tả việc đó là tạm thời do bệnh gây ra thì có thể nói: My father
gets angry easily because...
- My younger brother has just graduated from National Economic University.
- He works as a accountant of Viettel company.
- At the same time, he is preparing for his/theeconomical master exams
Nếu bạn muốn nói đến thi đầu vào thì có thể dùng entrance exam; tra từ điển từ economical
lại đi nhé
-He is considersed as a dynamic person.
- Inspite In spite of beingextremly hard-working, they had brought up their offspring up to be
become the learned persons well-educated people.
hard-working là tính từ nên phải có động từ TO BE đi kèm nha.
- My husband is the youngest in among his siblings.
- He is a manufacture director in a pharmaceutical company.
- He’s good at using tools to fix things or makeing things.
or là 1 coordinator nối 2 phrase/clause tương đương nhau nên khi đã dùng V-ing sau Prep at
cho động từ use, bạn cũng phải làm tương tự với động từ make ở vế sau.
- At last, we hope that we will welcome a new member in the near future.
Phía trên bạn không dùng từ liên kết câu, cuối cùng dùng thì quá đột ngột & cũng chẳng mang
lại hiệu quả gì trong việc hệ thống ý tưởng.
Bài bạn viết khá kỹ, các lỗi sai không đáng kể chỉ cần cẩn thận hơn là được. Bạn nắm khá
vững ngữ pháp & đã sử dụng được 1 số từ vựng đáng kể để diễn đạt ý, mình nghĩ bạn đã vượt
trên trình độ beginner rồi Thời gian tới bạn nên học thêm các cấu trúc câu & viết nhiều câu
ghép/câu phức hơn --> higher level. Best wishes.
Bài viết của nangmai8
My family is very happy, glad and have much smile.My family have five people.:my parents,
my oldest sister and my younger brothẹr .My father is sixty-five years old and my mother is fìty-
fỉve years old this years. My father was a doctor.He was good doctor . He worked at 103
hospital.Beside, he is a wonderful father. He is working at home now. And my mother was a
teacher. She's at home now. Every day, she cooks, read a newspaper about the health. And they
retired five years ago. I fell proud of them .On free time, they always visit their friends.They
have a lot of the same like.For example, they like poem, to go to the cinema.very a lot of . About
my oldest sister, she is working ThanhSen's chemist. She is a chemist.She is twenty three years
old. She is a beautyful girl,she is a single. we have a lot of the same like. we like to go shoping,
to listen to music, and to sleep.
My younger sister is eighteen years old. He is a pupil at Phan Đinh Phung school. although we
grew but we still occasionally hit
Bài sửa của wellfrog và Bổ sung của Conan Doyle
Bài viết của bạn có quá nhiều lỗi sai ngữ pháp lẫn cấu trúc ,ngữ nghĩa ,nếu để vậy mà sửa
từng câu thì "nát" hết .Bạn phải giới thiệu theo thú tự : tuổi ,nghề nghiệp .Còn các sự kiện
thì phải theo quá trình thời gian ,chứ không tự nhiên viết cha đã làm bác sĩ ,giờ ở nhà ,rồi
nhãy qua nói là đã về hưu .Mà đáng lẽ phải viết là : đã về hưu ,trứoc đây làm bác sĩ ,giờ ở
nhà .Chỉ có một người chị thì không cần phải nói là chị lớn nhất .câu kết luận về gia đình
bạn là một gia đính hạnh phúc nên đặt ở cuối bài viết thay cho lờii kết.Đã dùng although
thì không dùng but nữa .Trong thơpì gian rảnh dùng : in sỡ hửu free time
Glad : chỉ một trạng thái vui mừng tạm thời ,không thể dùng tả về tính chất của một gia
đình được
Dưới đây là bài tham khảo sau khi đã sửa lỗi và sắp xếp lại ý
My family has five people.:my parents, my elder sister and my younger brothẹr and
me.My father is sixty-five years old and my mother is fìfty- fỉve years old .Both of them
retired five years ago. My father used to work as a doctor in 103 hospital. He is not only a
good doctor but also a wonderful father .My mother used to be a teacher .Every day, she
cooks, reads a newspaper about health.In their free time ,my parents often visit their
friends.They have the same interests such as reading poems and going to the cinema .I feel
proud of my parents.My elder sister is twenty- three years old.She works as a chemist in
Thanh Sen Company.She is still single though she is a beautiful girl.I and she both like
listening to music,going shopping and ..sleeping ! My younger brothẹr is eighteen years
old.He is a student of Phan Đinh Phung high school.Although we are grown-ups , we still
occasionally fight each other.In spite of that , my family is a very happy one.
Bài viết của LOVELYCATVT
In my family,there are six people:my father,my mother,old sister and two young
sisters.Myfather is very fun and good.He sometimes makes many funnies for us and give us
advices.He is a fisher.My father has two ships.How about my mother?She is very strick and
parental but she loves us very much.She often cooks meals very well and I admire parents.My
old sister is twenty-six year old.She is very fun,good and gentle.She often gives me money when
I go away.My young sister is a student.One is six year old,she begins to go to school and she is
very intelligent,the other is studying at the high school.Whenever my family gathers,we are very
happy.It is also the place when I am sad,tired and disappointed and return home.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
In my family,there are six people:my father,my mother,old sister and two young sisters ,my
elder sister and my two younger sisters
chị gái dùng : elder sister
em gái dùng : younger sister
.Myfather is very fun jolly and good.He sometimes makes many funnies for us tells us funny
stories and gives us advices
không hiểu ý bạn dùng make funnies với nghĩa gì ,advice là danh từ không đếm được nên
không thêm s
.He is a fisherman.My father has two ships.How about my mother?She.My mother is very
strick strict and parental but she loves us very much.She often cooks meals very well and. I
admire parents.
không nên tự hỏi như thế này :How about my mother?
cook well là chỉ bản chất của con ngưòi không thể dùng often được
My old elder sister is twenty-six years old.She is very fun jolly ,good and gentle.She often gives
me money when I go away.My young sister is a student .One is six year old,.One of my
younger sisters is six year old .She begins to go to school and she is very intelligent,the other is
studying at the a high school student .Whenever my family gathers,we are very happy.It is also
the place when I am sad,tired and disappointed and return home I return to when I feel
sad,tired and disappointed
Family vừa có thể là số ít vừa có thể là số nhiều tùy theo ý nghĩa .Nếu xem như một đơn vị
thì dùng số ít ,còn xem như một tậpthể thì dùng số nhiều
My family is rich -> xem như một đơn vị
My family are eating -> xem như một tập thể
Bài viết của 76076447
I ware very lazy writing ago. So I don't understand anything when I try to learn English. Tsuki said that: " I haven't
base of grammar". I thing that you told correct about me. But now, I know that writing is very important in learning
English. I try my best to write anything that I can do by English. I hope I can more study than I am.
My family have five members. My family is composed of my father, my mother, two my elder brothers and the last
one is me. The first person that I tell is my father, he was a surgeon (I have found "surgeon" in my e-dictionary), but
now he stays at home for relaxing with his wife. My mother was a doctor, too. She is younger than her husband.
She is a obstetric doctor.
My eldest brother is a obstetric doctor (like that his mother). He is thirty-seven years old. He was married in two
thousands years, his wife is a doctor, too. He is a teacher of Hanoi university of medicine. His family has a girl. She
is very active and beautiful She is seven years old and she is a student at primary Trung Tu school.
My elder brother is a constructor. He graduated for three years ago. He have just married, his wife is a constructor,
too.
Finally, I want to produce something about myself.
I have become an electric engineer, I graduated from HUT(Hanoi university of technology). I'm looking for a new
job. But I haven't found it. Two months ago, I worked for a mechanical and automatical company. But I don't like it
so much. So now I'm staying at home to learn English online and waiting for a new job.
I
Bài sửa của wellfrog
ware used to be very lazy writing ago to write. So ,so I did not understand anything when I tried to learn English. Tsuki said that:
" I haven't base of grammar".
used to : đã từng ( chỉ hành động trước đây mà bây giờ không còn nữa)-> bây giờ hết lười rồi -> viết một bài dài ngoằng
làm W sửa muốn xỉu luôn
I thing think that you told correct about me What she told me is true .
Bạn dùng told correct là sai vì correct là tính từ còn told là động từ thường
But now, I know that writing is very important in learning English. I try my best to write anything that I can do by in English.
Bằng ngôn ngữ gì thì dùng IN không dùng BY nhé
I hope I can more study than I am.
chà câu này tối nghĩa quá ,lại sai ngữ pháp nữa ,không biết ý bạn là gì .
Cấu trúc so sánh more...than là ở giữa phải là tính từ hoặc trạng từ ,còn bạn dùng động từ là sai rồi .Muốn nói học nhiều
hơn thì dùng : study more than
chắc là ý bạn muốn nói học nhiều hơn khã năng của mình ,như vậy thì nên viết là :
I hope I will study more than I can
My family have has five members. My family is composed of They are my father, my mother, two my my two elder brothers and the
last one is me. The first person that I want to tell about is my father, he was he used to be a surgeon (I have found "surgeon" in
my e-dictionary), but now he stays at home for relaxing with his wife. My mother wasis a doctor, too. She is younger than her
husband. She is a obstetric doctor.
Nói về ai dùng : tell about
Tránh sự lập lại không cần thiết khi dùng : gia đình tôi gồm...,gia đình tôi có ...
dùng used to + inf. để chỉ sự việc ở quá khứ mà bây giờ không còn
My eldest brother is an obstetric doctor (like that his mother). He is thirty-seven years old. He was married in two thousands years
got married two years ago, his wife is a doctor, too. He is a teacher of Hanoi university of medicine. His family has a girlThey
have a daughter . She is very active and beautiful. She is seven years old and she is a student pupil at primary Trung Tu school.
thousands years ??? anh bạn là ngừoi hay thần thánh nhỉ !? cưới vợ 2 ngàn năm rồi cơ à !
phân biệt giữa : be married và get married
get married ; là ngày cưới vợ còn be married là tình trạng đã lập gia đình
I am married : tôi đã lập gia đình ( chỉ tình trạng của tôi hiện nay là không còn độc thân)
I got married in 2000 : tôi cưới vợ năm 2000 (năm mà tôi đám cưới )
My The other elder brother is a constructor. He graduated for three years ago. He have just got married, his wife is a constructor,
too.
Finally, I want to produce introduce something about myself.
I have become am an electric engineer, I graduated from HUT(Hanoi university of technology). I'm looking for a new job. But ,but I
haven't found it. Two months ago, I worked for a mechanical and automatical company. But ,but I don't like it so much. So now I'm
staying at home to learn English online and waiting for a new job
Đã dùng ago thì không dùng for nữa
trước but dùng dấu phẩy không dùng dấu chấm
Bài viết của dreamlike_river
I have a happy familỵ There are four people in my family: my father, my mother, my elder brother and me.We live
in Hanoi together.
My parent were soldier. My father is 66 years old. My mother is 60 years old. Now, they retire. My father met my
mother in the war at Truong Son forest. At that time, she was a volunteer and he was a her capital. They fell in love.
Three years laster, they got married. My father is a gentle, close-mouthed but very stern . My brother and me is also
afraid of him. My mother is a funny, good-natured and an asiduity. I proud on when everybody say that: I look like
my mothẹr
My elder brother is 35 years old. He is a programmer. He is marriage. He is handsome and funny . When I was a
child, I followed him everywhere and he bought many cakes to me. I love him very much.
The last person in my family is me. I am a programmer. I am 25 years old. In my family, I'm always a little prince. I
love my familỵ
Bài sửa của wellfrog
I have a happy familỵ There are four people in my family: my father, my mother, my elder brother and
me.We live in Hanoi together.
My parent were soldier. My father is 66 years old. My mother is 60 years old. Now, they retired soldiers.
My parent phải dùng số nhiều -> My parents
Đã từng là quân nhân thì dùng cấu trúc used to + inf. nhưng nên tóm gọn câu lại thành retired
soldiers : những quân nhân đã về hưu
My father met my mother in the war at Truong Son forest during the war. At that time, she was a
volunteer and he was a her capital her commander. They fell in love. Three years laster, they got
married. My father is a gentle, close-mouthed but very stern . My brother and me is alsoare both afraid
of him. My mother is a funny jolly , good-natured and an asiduity assiduous . I feel proud on when
everybody says that: I look like my mothẹr
không dùng a, an trước tính từ nhé
He is a gentle (sai )
He is gentle (đúng)
He is a gentle man (đúng)
proud là tính từ trứoc phải có to be hoặc linking verb (look, feel ..)
My elder brother is 35 years old. He is a programmer. He is marriage married. He is handsome and
funny jolly . When I was a child, I followed him everywhere and he bought many cakes to for me. I love
him very much.
The last person in my family is me. I am a programmer. I am 25 years old. In my family, I'm always a
little prince to the others . I love my familỵ
funny : buồn cười -> có tính chê
jolly : vui nhộn
hoặc có thể dùng : have a sense of humour / to be humorous có tính hài hước
Bài viết ấn tượng ,lưu ý cách dùng tính từ -danh từ ,a ,an .Nếu cố gắng tìm cách nối các câu cho suông sẽ
hơn thì tốt
Bài viết của ducanh2003
My family
There are seven people in my family. We live in a suburb of a small city. I have two elder
brothers, a sister in law( she is my eldest brother's wife, her name Thinh), a lovely niece (a one-
month baby). My parents retired however my mother still earns money as a sale woman in a
small market near our house. My first brother works in a tea company, he is a high level
electrician. His wife works for a foreign company in garment field, she is a worker. My second
brother is a engineer, he has an own workshop. He also sells electrical instrument, his business is
rather good and makes quite much money. One of my friends said that I am really happy when
having a such family. I love my family, my family always play an important role in my heart
and my life.
Bài sửa của Tsuki
My family
There are seven people in my family. We live in a suburb of a small city. I have two elder
brothers, a sister in law( she is my eldest brother's wife, her name is Thinh), a lovely niece (a
one-month baby).
My parents retired, however, my mother still earns money as a sales-woman in a small market
near our house
My first brother works in a tea company, he is a high level electrician. His wife works for a
foreign company in garment field, she is a worker. My second brother is an engineer, he has/ an
own a workshop. He also sells electrical instruments, his business is rather good and makes quite
much money. One of my friends said that I am/was really happy when having a such a family.
Dùng has rồi thì không dùng own nữa, 2 từ đó đều chỉ sở hữu.
Bạn lưu ý lại cách dùng Reported Speech. Ở đây mình không biết là bạn vô tình hay cố ý dùng
present tense cho động từ trong reported clause: One of my friend said that I am... vì thông
thường cả reporting verb (say) và the verb in the reported clause sẽ dùng ở past tense. Tuy
nhiên, mình giả định trường hợp này bạn muốn nhấn mạnh sự việc đó vẫn còn thật trong hiện
tại nên đã dùng present tense nên không thể nói là bạn sai
I love my family, my family always plays an important role in my heart and my life.
Nhìn chung bài bạn viết tốt, mình chẳng phải sửa gì nhiều ngoài vài lỗi lặt vặt mà mình tin là
nếu bạn xem kỹ bài lại thì sẽ không bị sai. Giữ vững phong độ nhe
Bài viết của LOVELYCATVT
In my family,there are six people:my father,my mother,old sister and two young sisters. My
father is very fun and good. He sometimes makes many funnies for us and give us advices =>
ADVICE. B/c ADVICE is an uncountable Noun) Câu này nên sửa thành : He somtimes
makes us laugh and give us some advice.hoặc He sometimes tells jokes .He is a fisher.My
father has two ships.How about my mother?She is very strick strict and parental ???but she
loves us very much.She often cooks meals very well and I admire parents.My old sister is
twenty-six years old.She is very fun humorous too,good helpful and gentle.She often gives me
money when I go away.My young sisters is are students.One is six year old. She begins to go to
school and she is very intelligent. The other is studying at the high school.Whenever my family
gathers,we are very happy.It is also the place when I am sad,tired and disappointed and return
home.
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal
Comment:
Bài viết của bạn còn mắc lỗi như:
1. Khi nói về ai đó có khiếu hài hước, ta dùng:
+sense of humor
EG: She has the sense of humor
+ hoặc là: humorous (adj)
EG: She is very humorous.
*Tuyệt đối ko đc dùng “FUN” hay “FUNNY” để diễn tả tính hài hước. Chỉ dùng 2 từ này
khi đi chung với câu chuyện.
EG: a funny story.
2. Khi nhắc đến 2, 3…..tuổi trở lên thì chữ “YEAR” phải thêm “S” (Vì là số nhiều)
EG: I’m 13 years old
3. Trong bài viết bạn có câu: He/ she is good. Quả thật mình ko hiểu bạn muốn nói đến đức
tính nào. Nhưng nếu bạn đề cập đến sự có ích thì phải dùng chữ “Helpful”
EG: She/ he is very helpful.
4. Khi bạn nhắc đến các câu nói đùa phải dùng “TELL JOKES”.
*Note: Để dễ sửa bài cho các bạn hơn, mình đề nghị, khi viết, các bạn có thể ghi tiếng việt
kế bên từ tiếng Anh mà mình dùng.
That’s all
Bài viết của nguyendieuthuy
my family have four person.They are my parent,brother and me.my morther and my father are
both tercher.My eder borther is a student in university'hochiminh citỵAnd I am elearning in
economy university in Danang.My family are happy and funy.Now,my family have only two
person because I and my eder brother are living away from my familỵBut in the furter,we will
get to gather.We are happy and happy forever
Bài sửa của bluewatergal
my family have four personpeople.They are my parent parents,my brother and me.my
morthermother and my father are both tercher teachers.My ederelder borther is a student in
[s]university'hochiminh citỵ[/S](có phải ý bạn định viết "university in Ho chi minh city ")And I
am elearning learning in economy Economic university in Danang.My family are happy and
funy[color="red"]funny[/COLOR](Ở đây bạn không nên dùng từ "funny"vì từ này mang săc thái
ý nghĩa chê, chế giễu ).Now,my family have only two person people because I and my ederelder
brother are living away from my familỵBut in the furterfuture,we will get to gather.We are
happy and happy forever
comment:
1. Bạn còn sai nhiều lỗi chính tả quá
2. Câu "my mother and my father are both teacher"
Cách dùng từ "both"
both sth and sth
both of whích /them
"them , which " đại diện cho hai vật
nên ở đây bạn phải viết là
Both my mother and my father are teachers
Both my parents are teachers
Chào các bạn !
Các bạn cùng viết chủ đề "Tell me about your family" này nhé.
Trong chủ đề này các bạn hãy kể về gia đình mình: gồm mấy người ,tuổi tác ,nghề nghiệp
,tính tình …của từng người ,các bài viết cũng có độ dài như lần trứoc .Chú ý tránh những
lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp mà mình đã nhắc nhở
Có thể bắt đầu là :There are (four) people in my family…..
Một số từ vựng để các bạn tham khảo :
QUAN HỆ GIA ĐÌNH MỘT SỐ NGHỀ :
Grand mother : Bà nội ,ngoại Engineer : kỹ sư
Grand father : ông nội, ngoại Architect : kiến trúc sư
Grand parents : ông bà nurse : y tá
Parents : cha mẹ pilot : phi công
Grand son : cháu nội ,ngoại trai plumber : thợ sửa ống nước
Grand daughter : cháu nội ,ngoại gái carpenter : thợ mộc
father in- law : cha chồng ,vợ Electrician : thợ điện
mother in- law : mẹ chồng ,vợ Director : giám đốc
Daughter : con gái Vice director : phó giám đốc
Son : con trai barber : thợ hớt tóc
Daughter in-law : con dâu Hair dresser : thợ uốn tóc
Son in - law : con rể Manicurist : thợ làm móng
Mother in- law : mẹ chồng , vợ policeman : công an (nam)
Younger sister : em gái butcher : người bán thịt
Younger brother : em trai house wife : nội trợ
Elder sister : chị house maid : người giúp việc nhà
Elder brother : anh trai Journalist : nhà báo
Brother in-law : anh ,em rể singer : ca sĩ
Sister in - law : chị ,em dâu Farmer : nông dân
cousin : anh em họ ( con của cô, dì ,mợ ,thím Tailor : thợ may
..) Goldsmith : thợ bạc
Nephew :cháu trai ( con của anh,chị, em ) Draper : người bán quần áo
Niece :cháu gái ( con của anh ,chị ,em ) Musician : nhạc sĩ
aunt : cô ,dì ,mợ, thím Watchman : bảo vệ
uncle : chú ,bác ,cậu Sale man (woman) : người buôn bán (nữ)
step mother : mẹ kế MỘT SỐ MẪU CÂU ÁP DỤNG :
step son : con riêng (trai) He works as a doctor in Cho ray hospital:
step daughter : con riêng (gái) ông ta làm bác sĩ ở BV Chợ Rẩy
Half brother : anh em cùng cha khác mẹ, At the age of seventy ,my grand father still
cùng mẹ khác cha looks hale : ở tuổi 70 ông tôi trông vẫn còn
Half sister :chị em cùng cha khác mẹ ,cùng tráng kiện
mẹ khác cha
Bài viết của thanhphuong882002
My family have four persons, my mother, my father, my brother and me. Both my mother and my father
are a teacher. She is teaching in high school. She teaches chemistry. She is a gentle and righteous mother.
She is interested in her children's studying.She always gives me some useful advice in my life. My father
isn't teach, he work as an officer in the primary school. He is very strict. He always complains when my
brother and me make a mistake.My parents are both the same age, 49 years ọld My brother is a
student.He is 22 years old.He has just left school. Now, he is finding his job. His speciality is enviroment
science.He is very friendly and kind .Finally , i am a student. I am 19 years old. I am outgoing and have
my ambition.This is some information about my family.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
My family have has four persons people , my mother, my father, my brother and me. Both of my mother
and my father parents are a teacherteachers
cha mẹ số nhiều phải thêm s vào teacher
. She is teaching My mother teaches in a high school. She teaches chemistry.
Hai câu này nên tóm lại là :
My mother teaches chemistry in a high school.
She is a gentle and righteous mother. She is interested in her children's studying always concerned
about our study
be interested in : thích
be concerned about : quan tâm, lo lắng
.She always gives me some useful advice in my life. My father isn't teach, he work works as an officer in
the a primary school. He is very strict. He always complains when my brother and me I make a mistake.
chủ từ phải dùng I
My parents are both the same age, 49 years ọld ; My brother,who is 22 years old, is a student graduate
.He is 22 years old.He has just left school. Now, he is finding looking for his job. His speciality is
environmental science.He is very friendly and kind .Finally , i I am a student. I am 19 years old. I am
outgoing and have my ambition ambitious .This is some information about my family
Student : là sinh viên còn đang học đại học ,còn nếu đã ra trường rồi thì dùng : graduate
find : tìm thấy
looking for : tìm kiếm ( chưa thấy )
Bài viết của Mr ZigZag
My family have five members. That are my father, my morther, my younger sister , my younger
brother and me. My familly lives at Phu Hoa town(Long Xuyên city) I am Phuong, I am 14
years old and I am a pupil. . First, My father is a teacher. Character's him is very happy.
However I am very fear father, but I love father. Next, My mother is noise , she has long hair
and black. Before I go to bed, she usually said :"Sleep well". I love my mother very much. Next,
my youger sister , she is 10 years old and she is excellent pupil of my primary school. From 7- 8
p.m, I usually teach her about exercise. Finally, My younger brother is 4 years old. He is very
much alive. I am very love my familly. With me ,family always is the assured support. If I have
one wish . I will wish " My familly aways is happy."
Bài sửa của wellfrog
My family have five members. That They are my father, my morther, my younger sister , my younger
brother and me. My familly lives at We live in Phu Hoa town(Long Xuyên city) I am My name is
Phuong, I am 14 years old and I am a pupil. . First, My father is a teacher. Character's him is very happy
He is a jovial man . However, I am very fear father fear him very much ,but. I love my father.Next, My
mother is noise talkative , she has long hair and black long black hair . Before I go to bed, she usually
said says :"Sleep well". I love my mother very much. Next, my youger sister , she is 10 years old and she
is an excellent pupil of in my primary school. From 7- to 8 p.m, I usually teach her about some
exercises. Finally, My younger brother is 4 years old. He is very much alive. active I am very love my
familly very much . With For me ,family always is is always the assured a reliable support. If I have
one wish . I will wish " My familly is aways is happy
Giới từ chỉ nơi chốn em nhớ như sau :
-Các nơi chốn nhỏ như : sân bay ,trường học ,khu mua bán .... thì dùng AT
- Các nơi chốn lớn từ làng ,xả , quận ,thành phố ,tỉnh ,thị xả ,nước ... thì dùng IN
I am + tên : chỉ đựoc sử dụng trong văn nói khi giới thiệu trực tiếp ,còn trong văn viết ,không phảo
giới thiệu trực tiếp thì dùng my name is ...
Không phải diễn tả sự việc theo thời gian nên không dùng : first ,second .. .Có thể dùng : the oldest
person in my family ....,hoặc : the first person I want to tell you about is ....
Chữ family chỉ có một chữ "L" thôi em nhé !
Character's him is very happy : chà ! câu này sai nghiêm trọng đây nhé !
thứ nhất đại từ sở hửu không dùng dấu"'s" :
the book's him (sai)
his book ( đúng )
the book of him ( đúng )
thứ hai là " happy " là tính từ chỉ trạng thái nhất thời của con ngừoi chứ không phải để chỉ tính
tình ,muốn nói đến tính tình thì dùng jovial ( tánh tình vui vẽ )
Sau However phải có dẩu phẩy
Fear là động từ ,không dùng với to be
alive : còn sống !
active : hiếu động
like very much : rất thích
không đựoc dùng very like ,vì like là động từ mà very chỉ đứng trước tính từ và trạng từ thôi
Các trạng từ năng diễn như : always ,often ... đặt trứoc động từ thừong ,sau to be
Bài viết của peden
"There are 7 people in my familỵ My father is a good photoghrapher. He is very gentle and
boon. My mother is a home-maker.She cooks very well and she is always caring to everybody in
my family.I have an elder sister ,an elder brother and a younger sister. My younger sister is a
pupil in class 9A1.My brother is a student ,he is studying in HB university.My sister graduated a
pedagogic college last year and now she is applying for a post.Another people is my
grandmother,she is very old but she is still strong-minded. The last one is me. I am in the
eleventh grade and i am not good at English. I feel happy because i have a good home. I love my
family so much".
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal
"There are 7 seven people in my familỵ My father is a good photoghrapher. He is very gentle
and boon. My mother is a home-maker.She cooks very well and she is always caring to about
(We use CARE TO to talk about caring to do sth) everybody in my family.I have an elder
sister ,an elder brother and a younger sister. My younger sister is a pupilstudent in class
9A1.My brother is a student ,he is studying in at HB => Don't use short form in Writing
university.My sister graduated a pedagogic college last year and now . Now she is applying for a
post.Another people person/ member is my grandmother,she is very old but she is still strong-
minded. The last one is me. I am in the eleventh grade and i am not good at English. I feel happy
because i have a good home =>Câu này ko ổn cho lắm. Bạn nên sủa là Happy family. I love
my family so much".
Comment:
Bài viết của bạn khá ok. Nhưng có 1 số điểm cần luư ý:
1. Không được viết tắt trong đoạn văn
2. Không được viết số, mà phải viết chữ
3. ANOTHER + Singular Countable Noun(EG: another person)
4. Không nên dùng ngôn ngữ chat (VD: u =>you)
Bài sửa bổ sung của wellfrog
My sister graduated a pedagogic college => My sister graduated from pedagogic college
I am in the eleventh grade and i am not good at English.
=>Although I am in the eleventh grade ,I am not good at English.
hoặc :I am in the eleventh grade ;however,I am not good at English.
Bài viết của Lê Như Nguyện
There are four people in my family:my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.My family
lives in Nhatrang city.My family has a establishment which makes dry squid and beef.Both my
father and my mother work there.My father is very strict.He likes to talk with his friends in his
free time.My mother is gentle and kind.She cooks very well.She likes listen to classcial
musis.She usually gives us some useful advices when we have problems.My father and my
mother always help the poor people and the oldster.My younger brother is studying at high
school.He is a smart pupil in class.At home,he is a taciturnity people.He likes listen to rock
music and plays games on computer.And the last one is me.I have just graduated from university
for 5 months.I am finding the job now.I feel very happy when I lives in my family.I loves my
family so much.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
There are four people in my family:my father,my mother,my younger brother and me.My family
lives in Nhatrang city.My family has an establishment which makes dry squid and beef.Both of
my father and my mother work there.My father is very strict.He likes to talk with his friends in
his free time.My mother is gentle and kind.She cooks very well.She likes listening to classcial
musis classical music .She usually gives us some useful advices when we have problems.My
father and my mother always help the poor people and the oldster.My younger brother is
studying at high school.He is a smart pupil student in class.At home,he is a taciturnity people.
taciturn man .He likes listening to rock music and plays games on computer.And the last one is
me.I have just graduated from university for 5 months.I am finding looking for thea job now.I
feel very happy when I lives in my family.I loves my family so much
find : tìm thấy
look for : tìm kiếm ( chưa thấy )
Chủ từ là I thì động từ không thêm s nhé
he is a taciturnity people : câu này có hai lỗi sai:
1. a là số ít trong khi people là số nhiều
taciturnity là danh từ phải đổi thành tính từ ( tacitur) để đặt trước danh từ
Học sinh cấp 2 trở lên dùng student
Bài viết của heo con lun
there are six persons in my family,those are parents,three old brothers and me.although they live
in a house but everybody have a different personalitỵ
both father and mother are quiet,the oldest bother is very hot tempered,i always fear him when
he is angry,the orther and me are joillỵ,i love my family,they are friendly with people,we live in
a poor village but we always love together,now i live sofar my family but i have never fogotten
day which i lived beside familỵ
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal
There are six persons people in my family,those .Those =>nên chấm are parents :three old brothers and
me. Although they live in a house but everybody have has a different personalitỵ (=>Ý bạn nói về tính
cách đúng ko? Mình nghĩ bạn nên dùng chữ CHARACTER.). Both father and mother are quiet
reserved .The . The (=> nên chấm)oldest bother is very hot tempered,i .I always fear him when he is
angry .The orther other and me I I are [s][b] joillỵ jolly .I love my family,they are friendly with people
. We live in at a poor village but we always love together each other .Now i I ive sofar far my family
but I have never fogotten never forget the days which i I lived beside familỵ
Comment:
1. Sau khi hết 1 ý, bạn nên chấm. Câu văn bạn hơi dài.
2. Chữ "I"(tôi) luôn luôn viết hoa
3. Chữ đầu câu luôn viết hoa
=> Đây là ý kiến của mình về các lỗi của bạn.
Bài sửa bổ sung của Wellfrog
Although theywe live in a house but, everybody has a different personalitỵ
Đã dùng although thì không dùng but nữa
Gia đình đương bao gồm mình trong đó nên không thể dùng THEY mà phải dùng WE
the orther and me are joillỵ: câu này sai kinh khủng quá :lỗi spelling :
orther-> other
joillỵ -> jollỵ
lỗi cấu trúc :
Đã dùng the others là ý nói tất cã những người còn lại(trong đó có tôi ) ,nên không thể
thêm : and me nữa ,cho nên câu sửa thành :
the others are jolly
those are parents,three old brothers : câu này đổi thành :
They are my parents ,my three elder brothers
Anh chị ,cha mẹ .... khi dùng phải dùng sở hửu phía trước ,còn chữ elder sao bạn không
tham khảo gợi ý của mình ở đề bài topic ?
Bài viết của cadpig17
My family is a normal one with four members: my parents, my younger brother and me. We live
in a small house in Hanoi. My father is a mechanical engineer. He's tough, but he loves us. Some
times he was unfair and made my mother angry. Honestly, I don't like my father very much. I
love my mother. She's gentle and kind. She always solves every trouble in my family without
argueing. Particularly, she's so well at cooking that I wonder how I can learn that from her. The
third member is my little brother. He's twelve years old. He likes only Pokemon games. And the
last one is me. I'm an undergraduate in NEU. My dream is getting a good job and earn a lot of
money. My family is my life, although sometimes I disagree with my father and argue him. And
I know we love each others.
Bài sửa của metooyou
My family is a normal one with four members: my parents, my younger brother and me. We live in a
small house in Hanoi. My father is a mechanical engineer. He's tough, but he loves us. Some times
Sometimes he was unfair and made my mother angry. Honestly, I don't like my father very much. I love
my mother. She's gentle and kind. She always solves every trouble in my family without argueing
arguing. Particularly, she's so well good at cooking that I wonder how I can learn that from her. The third
member is my little brother. He's twelve years old. He likes only Pokemon games. And the last one is me.
I'm an undergraduate in NEU. My dream is getting a good job and earn a lot of money. My family is my
life, although sometimes I disagree with my father and argue him. And I know we love each others.
- Câu này: "Sometimes he was unfair and made my mother angry" đúng nhưng nên sửa lại là:
"Sometimes he is unfair and make my mother angry." Câu này nên để ở thì hiện tại vì miêu tả sự thật,
hành động vẫn diễn ra thường xuyên.
- Nên tránh viết tắt trong văn viết, nên viết "He is tough", không nên "He's tough"
- good at something: giỏi về cái gì đó
Ex: He is good at math.
- to be well at thời điểm nào đó
Ex: She is well at this time.
Bài sửa bổ sung của wellfrog
My dream is getting a good job and earn a lot of money
câu này liên từ and phải nối hai loại từ giống nhau : getting thì phải đi đôi với earning
=> My dream is getting a good job and earning a lot of money
argue him => argue with him
we love each others. => we love one another.
không có each others mà chỉ có each other ,nhưng mà chữ này dùng cho hai đối tượng mà thôi,còn ba đối
tượng trở lên thì dùng one another
Trên đây là những lỗi ngữ pháp ,còn về cách kết hợp các câu của bạn vẫn chưa có sự kết nối liền lạc ,lần
sau nhớ viết cho liền lạc hơn nhé
Bài viết của ourfamily
I have a small family with three members, my husband, my son and I. The first one, my husband
is thirty-one years old, and he is one year older than I am. He is a construction engineer. He likes
his job and tries my best to work. Besides, he also loves our family, so he often helps me do
housework. He is a bright example for my son to follow.
The second one, my son is four years old, and he is learning at a kingdergarten. He is really
stubborn, but he is so lovely, too. He can do some things to take care himself and help us. He
draws quite well, and he likes reading picture books.
Finally, I want to say that I love our family so much. I'm really happy to live with my husband
and my son.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
I have a small family with three members, my husband, my son and I. The first one, my
husband, is thirty-one years old, and he is one year older than I am. He is a construction
engineer. He likes his job and tries my his best to work. Besides, he also loves our family, so he
often helps me do the housework. He is a bright example for my son to follow.
The second one, my son ,is four years old, and he.He is learning at a kingdergarten
kindergarten. He is really stubborn, but he is also so lovely, too. He can do some things to take
care of himself and help us. He draws quite well, and he likes reading picture books.
Finally, I want to say that I love our family so much. I'm really happy to live with my husband
and my son.
Chủ từ nào thì dùng sở hửu của người đó trước chữ best nhé
I try my best
She tries her best
Take care of : chăm sóc
Trong câu The first one, my husband is thirty-one years old
The first one là chủ từ của is, còn my husbandlà đồng cách danh từ (cùng là chủ từ) nên
nhất thiết phải có 2 dấu phẩy phân cách
Cần phân biệt giữa too và also
Too : là cũng (vậy) => giống như ý trước đó
Also : cũng (thêm ý khác ngoài ý trước )
ex:He is nine : anh ta 9 tuổi
I am nine ,too : tôi cũng 9 tuổi ( giống như anh ta : 9 tuổi )
He eats a cake
He also drinks milk (anh ta cũng uống sửa : ngoài ăn bánh còn uống thêm sửa )
- Bài viết khá tốt ,chỉ có một số lỗi nhỏ nêu trên
Bài viết của thanhkha
There are four members in my family: my father, my mother, my sister, my brother and me. I am youngest sister, so
I am happy. My father is 49 years olad.He is a shoesm(thợ giày)…..He is a self-opinionated man but he love them.
My mother is 50years old.she is a house wife . At home my mother takes care of family carefully. All of working
she does. She cooks a meal very delicious. My sister is 28 years old and last year, she have married.She is a
personal assistant. My brother works as a doctor in General hospital.he is very young when he is 25 years old. And I
study grade 11 in Phan Chau Trinh high school. This is the my small family
Bài sửa của Tsuki
- I am the youngest sister, so I am (happy)/ I am always spoiled by the others
So sánh nhất phải đi cùng với the: the + short Adj-est/ the + most + long Adj.
Vì bạn là người nhỏ nhất nên bạn hạnh phúc; chỗ này mình gợi ý thêm động từ spoil; be
spoiled by the others = bạn được nuông chìu bởi những người còn lại trong gia đình hehe
- My father is 49 years oldad.He is a shoesmmaker(thợ giày)…..
- He is a self-opinionated man but he loves themhis family/(all of) us.
Đại từ nhân xưng làm túc từ them ở đây không rõ nghĩa, nếu bạn muốn nói chúng tôi ,vì trong
đó có bạn, thì bạn phải dùng us hoặc all of us; hoặc bạn cũng có thể nói là ông ấy yêu gia đình
của mình: loves his family, nhớ chia động từ cho ngôi thứ 3 số ít.
- .sShe is a house -wife.
Nhớ sau dấu chấm phải viết hoa nha; housewife = homemaker là MỘT danh từ đơn, nó được
viết dính liền nhau chứ không tách ra.
- At home my mother takes care of the/herfamily carefully
Danh từ số ít không đứng riêng lẻ 1 mình, bạn nên thêm mạo từ hoặc tính từ sở hữu vào nha.
- All of working she does. <--
Câu này mình không rõ bạn muốn nói gì, nếu như bạn muốn diễn đạt ý là mẹ mình đã làm hết
công việc nhà bạn có thể viết: She does all the domestic chores (by herself). (nhưng vậy thì
buồn wa', phải có người share việc nhà chứ ha)
- She cooks a meal very delicious meals/ cooks very well
Mẹ nấu những bữa ăn rất ngon chứ mẹ nấu có 1 bữa thôi sao?
- My sister is 28 years old and last year, she have married.
Hành động kết hôn đã xảy ra & đã kết thúc trong quá khứ nên bạn dùng Simple Past, không
dùng Present Perfect; trạng từ last year nên đặt ở phía sau động từ: she married/ got married
last year
- My brother works as a doctor in the General hospital.
General hospital ở đây có nghĩa xác định, dùng mạo từ xác định the đi kèm.
- hHe is very young when he is 25 years old.
Nhớ viết hoa sau dấu chấm câu. Câu này mình hiểu là anh của bạn rất trẻ khi anh í 25 tuổi,
còn bi giờ thì ... (rất già) Nếu đó không phải ý của bạn thì bạn có thể viết là He is 25 (years old)
and he is very young/ He is very young, just/only 25
- And I studyam in eleventh/11th grade 11 in Phan Chau Trinh high school.
Không bắt đầu 1 câu bằng liên từ and. Cái này mình sửa rất nhiều lần rồi mà cũng có bạn bị
sai hoài, be in + ordinal number (số thứ tự) + grade
- This is the my small family --> That is all about my small family.
Nhìn chung bạn còn hay sai nhiều lỗi lặt vặt, lần sau nhớ reread lại bài trước khi gửi nha. Bạn
cũng nên học thêm từ vựng & cấu trúc câu để có thể diễn đạt ý dễ dàng hơn. Chúc nhanh tiến
bộ.
Bài viết của yencuong1981
I have get married for two years . As a result, there are many people in my familly. I have
special respect for my parents. My father is often quick-tempered because he has high blood
pressure over the year. My mother is very beautiful and douce. They have just retired for four
months. My younger brother has just graduated National Economic University. He work as a
accountant of Viettel company. At the same time, he is preparing economical master exams. He
considers as a dynamic person. My parents in law are farmers. Inspite of extremly hard working,
they had brought up their offspring become the learned persons. I’m trying to get on well with
them. My husband is the youngest in his siblings. He is a manufacture director in pharmaceutical
company. He’s good at using tools to fix things or make things. At last, we hope that we will
welcome a new member in the near future.
Bài sửa của Tsuki
- I have getgot married for two years
Pre Perfect: have/has+ Past Part
- (As a result), there are many people in my familly.
As a result được dùng để chỉ hệ quả của hành động xảy ra trước đó; nhưng hành động trước
đó là get married vậy là chỉ thêm có 1 người & không nói rõ là sống chung với gia đình chung
hay sống riêng mà hệ quả là gia đình đông người thì không thuyết phục cho lắm. Mình nghĩ
bạn có thể nói là I got married 2 years ago and since then we have lived with my parents .
As a result, ...
- My father is (often) quick-tempered because he has high blood pressure over the years
quick-tempered là tính từ thể hiện 1 phần tính cách không mang tính tạm thời, cho nên mình
quả thật chưa từng thấy người ta dùng với các trạng từ chỉ tần suất (often, frequently,
usually...). Nếu bạn muốn diễn tả việc đó là tạm thời do bệnh gây ra thì có thể nói: My father
gets angry easily because...
- My younger brother has just graduated from National Economic University.
- He works as a accountant of Viettel company.
- At the same time, he is preparing for his/theeconomical master exams
Nếu bạn muốn nói đến thi đầu vào thì có thể dùng entrance exam; tra từ điển từ economical
lại đi nhé
-He is considersed as a dynamic person.
- Inspite In spite of beingextremly hard-working, they had brought up their offspring up to be
become the learned persons well-educated people.
hard-working là tính từ nên phải có động từ TO BE đi kèm nha.
- My husband is the youngest in among his siblings.
- He is a manufacture director in a pharmaceutical company.
- He’s good at using tools to fix things or makeing things.
or là 1 coordinator nối 2 phrase/clause tương đương nhau nên khi đã dùng V-ing sau Prep at
cho động từ use, bạn cũng phải làm tương tự với động từ make ở vế sau.
- At last, we hope that we will welcome a new member in the near future.
Phía trên bạn không dùng từ liên kết câu, cuối cùng dùng thì quá đột ngột & cũng chẳng mang
lại hiệu quả gì trong việc hệ thống ý tưởng.
Bài bạn viết khá kỹ, các lỗi sai không đáng kể chỉ cần cẩn thận hơn là được. Bạn nắm khá
vững ngữ pháp & đã sử dụng được 1 số từ vựng đáng kể để diễn đạt ý, mình nghĩ bạn đã vượt
trên trình độ beginner rồi Thời gian tới bạn nên học thêm các cấu trúc câu & viết nhiều câu
ghép/câu phức hơn --> higher level. Best wishes.
Bài viết của nangmai8
My family is very happy, glad and have much smile.My family have five people.:my parents,
my oldest sister and my younger brothẹr .My father is sixty-five years old and my mother is fìty-
fỉve years old this years. My father was a doctor.He was good doctor . He worked at 103
hospital.Beside, he is a wonderful father. He is working at home now. And my mother was a
teacher. She's at home now. Every day, she cooks, read a newspaper about the health. And they
retired five years ago. I fell proud of them .On free time, they always visit their friends.They
have a lot of the same like.For example, they like poem, to go to the cinema.very a lot of . About
my oldest sister, she is working ThanhSen's chemist. She is a chemist.She is twenty three years
old. She is a beautyful girl,she is a single. we have a lot of the same like. we like to go shoping,
to listen to music, and to sleep.
My younger sister is eighteen years old. He is a pupil at Phan Đinh Phung school. although we
grew but we still occasionally hit
Bài sửa của wellfrog và Bổ sung của Conan Doyle
Bài viết của bạn có quá nhiều lỗi sai ngữ pháp lẫn cấu trúc ,ngữ nghĩa ,nếu để vậy mà sửa
từng câu thì "nát" hết .Bạn phải giới thiệu theo thú tự : tuổi ,nghề nghiệp .Còn các sự kiện
thì phải theo quá trình thời gian ,chứ không tự nhiên viết cha đã làm bác sĩ ,giờ ở nhà ,rồi
nhãy qua nói là đã về hưu .Mà đáng lẽ phải viết là : đã về hưu ,trứoc đây làm bác sĩ ,giờ ở
nhà .Chỉ có một người chị thì không cần phải nói là chị lớn nhất .câu kết luận về gia đình
bạn là một gia đính hạnh phúc nên đặt ở cuối bài viết thay cho lờii kết.Đã dùng although
thì không dùng but nữa .Trong thơpì gian rảnh dùng : in sỡ hửu free time
Glad : chỉ một trạng thái vui mừng tạm thời ,không thể dùng tả về tính chất của một gia
đình được
Dưới đây là bài tham khảo sau khi đã sửa lỗi và sắp xếp lại ý
My family has five people.:my parents, my elder sister and my younger brothẹr and
me.My father is sixty-five years old and my mother is fìfty- fỉve years old .Both of them
retired five years ago. My father used to work as a doctor in 103 hospital. He is not only a
good doctor but also a wonderful father .My mother used to be a teacher .Every day, she
cooks, reads a newspaper about health.In their free time ,my parents often visit their
friends.They have the same interests such as reading poems and going to the cinema .I feel
proud of my parents.My elder sister is twenty- three years old.She works as a chemist in
Thanh Sen Company.She is still single though she is a beautiful girl.I and she both like
listening to music,going shopping and ..sleeping ! My younger brothẹr is eighteen years
old.He is a student of Phan Đinh Phung high school.Although we are grown-ups , we still
occasionally fight each other.In spite of that , my family is a very happy one.
Bài viết của LOVELYCATVT
In my family,there are six people:my father,my mother,old sister and two young
sisters.Myfather is very fun and good.He sometimes makes many funnies for us and give us
advices.He is a fisher.My father has two ships.How about my mother?She is very strick and
parental but she loves us very much.She often cooks meals very well and I admire parents.My
old sister is twenty-six year old.She is very fun,good and gentle.She often gives me money when
I go away.My young sister is a student.One is six year old,she begins to go to school and she is
very intelligent,the other is studying at the high school.Whenever my family gathers,we are very
happy.It is also the place when I am sad,tired and disappointed and return home.
Bài sửa của wellfrog
In my family,there are six people:my father,my mother,old sister and two young sisters ,my
elder sister and my two younger sisters
chị gái dùng : elder sister
em gái dùng : younger sister
.Myfather is very fun jolly and good.He sometimes makes many funnies for us tells us funny
stories and gives us advices
không hiểu ý bạn dùng make funnies với nghĩa gì ,advice là danh từ không đếm được nên
không thêm s
.He is a fisherman.My father has two ships.How about my mother?She.My mother is very
strick strict and parental but she loves us very much.She often cooks meals very well and. I
admire parents.
không nên tự hỏi như thế này :How about my mother?
cook well là chỉ bản chất của con ngưòi không thể dùng often được
My old elder sister is twenty-six years old.She is very fun jolly ,good and gentle.She often gives
me money when I go away.My young sister is a student .One is six year old,.One of my
younger sisters is six year old .She begins to go to school and she is very intelligent,the other is
studying at the a high school student .Whenever my family gathers,we are very happy.It is also
the place when I am sad,tired and disappointed and return home I return to when I feel
sad,tired and disappointed
Family vừa có thể là số ít vừa có thể là số nhiều tùy theo ý nghĩa .Nếu xem như một đơn vị
thì dùng số ít ,còn xem như một tậpthể thì dùng số nhiều
My family is rich -> xem như một đơn vị
My family are eating -> xem như một tập thể
Bài viết của 76076447
I ware very lazy writing ago. So I don't understand anything when I try to learn English. Tsuki said that: " I haven't
base of grammar". I thing that you told correct about me. But now, I know that writing is very important in learning
English. I try my best to write anything that I can do by English. I hope I can more study than I am.
My family have five members. My family is composed of my father, my mother, two my elder brothers and the last
one is me. The first person that I tell is my father, he was a surgeon (I have found "surgeon" in my e-dictionary), but
now he stays at home for relaxing with his wife. My mother was a doctor, too. She is younger than her husband.
She is a obstetric doctor.
My eldest brother is a obstetric doctor (like that his mother). He is thirty-seven years old. He was married in two
thousands years, his wife is a doctor, too. He is a teacher of Hanoi university of medicine. His family has a girl. She
is very active and beautiful She is seven years old and she is a student at primary Trung Tu school.
My elder brother is a constructor. He graduated for three years ago. He have just married, his wife is a constructor,
too.
Finally, I want to produce something about myself.
I have become an electric engineer, I graduated from HUT(Hanoi university of technology). I'm looking for a new
job. But I haven't found it. Two months ago, I worked for a mechanical and automatical company. But I don't like it
so much. So now I'm staying at home to learn English online and waiting for a new job.
I
Bài sửa của wellfrog
ware used to be very lazy writing ago to write. So ,so I did not understand anything when I tried to learn English. Tsuki said that:
" I haven't base of grammar".
used to : đã từng ( chỉ hành động trước đây mà bây giờ không còn nữa)-> bây giờ hết lười rồi -> viết một bài dài ngoằng
làm W sửa muốn xỉu luôn
I thing think that you told correct about me What she told me is true .
Bạn dùng told correct là sai vì correct là tính từ còn told là động từ thường
But now, I know that writing is very important in learning English. I try my best to write anything that I can do by in English.
Bằng ngôn ngữ gì thì dùng IN không dùng BY nhé
I hope I can more study than I am.
chà câu này tối nghĩa quá ,lại sai ngữ pháp nữa ,không biết ý bạn là gì .
Cấu trúc so sánh more...than là ở giữa phải là tính từ hoặc trạng từ ,còn bạn dùng động từ là sai rồi .Muốn nói học nhiều
hơn thì dùng : study more than
chắc là ý bạn muốn nói học nhiều hơn khã năng của mình ,như vậy thì nên viết là :
I hope I will study more than I can
My family have has five members. My family is composed of They are my father, my mother, two my my two elder brothers and the
last one is me. The first person that I want to tell about is my father, he was he used to be a surgeon (I have found "surgeon" in
my e-dictionary), but now he stays at home for relaxing with his wife. My mother wasis a doctor, too. She is younger than her
husband. She is a obstetric doctor.
Nói về ai dùng : tell about
Tránh sự lập lại không cần thiết khi dùng : gia đình tôi gồm...,gia đình tôi có ...
dùng used to + inf. để chỉ sự việc ở quá khứ mà bây giờ không còn
My eldest brother is an obstetric doctor (like that his mother). He is thirty-seven years old. He was married in two thousands years
got married two years ago, his wife is a doctor, too. He is a teacher of Hanoi university of medicine. His family has a girlThey
have a daughter . She is very active and beautiful. She is seven years old and she is a student pupil at primary Trung Tu school.
thousands years ??? anh bạn là ngừoi hay thần thánh nhỉ !? cưới vợ 2 ngàn năm rồi cơ à !
phân biệt giữa : be married và get married
get married ; là ngày cưới vợ còn be married là tình trạng đã lập gia đình
I am married : tôi đã lập gia đình ( chỉ tình trạng của tôi hiện nay là không còn độc thân)
I got married in 2000 : tôi cưới vợ năm 2000 (năm mà tôi đám cưới )
My The other elder brother is a constructor. He graduated for three years ago. He have just got married, his wife is a constructor,
too.
Finally, I want to produce introduce something about myself.
I have become am an electric engineer, I graduated from HUT(Hanoi university of technology). I'm looking for a new job. But ,but I
haven't found it. Two months ago, I worked for a mechanical and automatical company. But ,but I don't like it so much. So now I'm
staying at home to learn English online and waiting for a new job
Đã dùng ago thì không dùng for nữa
trước but dùng dấu phẩy không dùng dấu chấm
Bài viết của dreamlike_river
I have a happy familỵ There are four people in my family: my father, my mother, my elder brother and me.We live
in Hanoi together.
My parent were soldier. My father is 66 years old. My mother is 60 years old. Now, they retire. My father met my
mother in the war at Truong Son forest. At that time, she was a volunteer and he was a her capital. They fell in love.
Three years laster, they got married. My father is a gentle, close-mouthed but very stern . My brother and me is also
afraid of him. My mother is a funny, good-natured and an asiduity. I proud on when everybody say that: I look like
my mothẹr
My elder brother is 35 years old. He is a programmer. He is marriage. He is handsome and funny . When I was a
child, I followed him everywhere and he bought many cakes to me. I love him very much.
The last person in my family is me. I am a programmer. I am 25 years old. In my family, I'm always a little prince. I
love my familỵ
Bài sửa của wellfrog
I have a happy familỵ There are four people in my family: my father, my mother, my elder brother and
me.We live in Hanoi together.
My parent were soldier. My father is 66 years old. My mother is 60 years old. Now, they retired soldiers.
My parent phải dùng số nhiều -> My parents
Đã từng là quân nhân thì dùng cấu trúc used to + inf. nhưng nên tóm gọn câu lại thành retired
soldiers : những quân nhân đã về hưu
My father met my mother in the war at Truong Son forest during the war. At that time, she was a
volunteer and he was a her capital her commander. They fell in love. Three years laster, they got
married. My father is a gentle, close-mouthed but very stern . My brother and me is alsoare both afraid
of him. My mother is a funny jolly , good-natured and an asiduity assiduous . I feel proud on when
everybody says that: I look like my mothẹr
không dùng a, an trước tính từ nhé
He is a gentle (sai )
He is gentle (đúng)
He is a gentle man (đúng)
proud là tính từ trứoc phải có to be hoặc linking verb (look, feel ..)
My elder brother is 35 years old. He is a programmer. He is marriage married. He is handsome and
funny jolly . When I was a child, I followed him everywhere and he bought many cakes to for me. I love
him very much.
The last person in my family is me. I am a programmer. I am 25 years old. In my family, I'm always a
little prince to the others . I love my familỵ
funny : buồn cười -> có tính chê
jolly : vui nhộn
hoặc có thể dùng : have a sense of humour / to be humorous có tính hài hước
Bài viết ấn tượng ,lưu ý cách dùng tính từ -danh từ ,a ,an .Nếu cố gắng tìm cách nối các câu cho suông sẽ
hơn thì tốt
Bài viết của ducanh2003
My family
There are seven people in my family. We live in a suburb of a small city. I have two elder
brothers, a sister in law( she is my eldest brother's wife, her name Thinh), a lovely niece (a one-
month baby). My parents retired however my mother still earns money as a sale woman in a
small market near our house. My first brother works in a tea company, he is a high level
electrician. His wife works for a foreign company in garment field, she is a worker. My second
brother is a engineer, he has an own workshop. He also sells electrical instrument, his business is
rather good and makes quite much money. One of my friends said that I am really happy when
having a such family. I love my family, my family always play an important role in my heart
and my life.
Bài sửa của Tsuki
My family
There are seven people in my family. We live in a suburb of a small city. I have two elder
brothers, a sister in law( she is my eldest brother's wife, her name is Thinh), a lovely niece (a
one-month baby).
My parents retired, however, my mother still earns money as a sales-woman in a small market
near our house
My first brother works in a tea company, he is a high level electrician. His wife works for a
foreign company in garment field, she is a worker. My second brother is an engineer, he has/ an
own a workshop. He also sells electrical instruments, his business is rather good and makes quite
much money. One of my friends said that I am/was really happy when having a such a family.
Dùng has rồi thì không dùng own nữa, 2 từ đó đều chỉ sở hữu.
Bạn lưu ý lại cách dùng Reported Speech. Ở đây mình không biết là bạn vô tình hay cố ý dùng
present tense cho động từ trong reported clause: One of my friend said that I am... vì thông
thường cả reporting verb (say) và the verb in the reported clause sẽ dùng ở past tense. Tuy
nhiên, mình giả định trường hợp này bạn muốn nhấn mạnh sự việc đó vẫn còn thật trong hiện
tại nên đã dùng present tense nên không thể nói là bạn sai
I love my family, my family always plays an important role in my heart and my life.
Nhìn chung bài bạn viết tốt, mình chẳng phải sửa gì nhiều ngoài vài lỗi lặt vặt mà mình tin là
nếu bạn xem kỹ bài lại thì sẽ không bị sai. Giữ vững phong độ nhe
Bài viết của LOVELYCATVT
In my family,there are six people:my father,my mother,old sister and two young sisters. My
father is very fun and good. He sometimes makes many funnies for us and give us advices =>
ADVICE. B/c ADVICE is an uncountable Noun) Câu này nên sửa thành : He somtimes
makes us laugh and give us some advice.hoặc He sometimes tells jokes .He is a fisher.My
father has two ships.How about my mother?She is very strick strict and parental ???but she
loves us very much.She often cooks meals very well and I admire parents.My old sister is
twenty-six years old.She is very fun humorous too,good helpful and gentle.She often gives me
money when I go away.My young sisters is are students.One is six year old. She begins to go to
school and she is very intelligent. The other is studying at the high school.Whenever my family
gathers,we are very happy.It is also the place when I am sad,tired and disappointed and return
home.
Bài sửa của thatsmygoal
Comment:
Bài viết của bạn còn mắc lỗi như:
1. Khi nói về ai đó có khiếu hài hước, ta dùng:
+sense of humor
EG: She has the sense of humor
+ hoặc là: humorous (adj)
EG: She is very humorous.
*Tuyệt đối ko đc dùng “FUN” hay “FUNNY” để diễn tả tính hài hước. Chỉ dùng 2 từ này
khi đi chung với câu chuyện.
EG: a funny story.
2. Khi nhắc đến 2, 3…..tuổi trở lên thì chữ “YEAR” phải thêm “S” (Vì là số nhiều)
EG: I’m 13 years old
3. Trong bài viết bạn có câu: He/ she is good. Quả thật mình ko hiểu bạn muốn nói đến đức
tính nào. Nhưng nếu bạn đề cập đến sự có ích thì phải dùng chữ “Helpful”
EG: She/ he is very helpful.
4. Khi bạn nhắc đến các câu nói đùa phải dùng “TELL JOKES”.
*Note: Để dễ sửa bài cho các bạn hơn, mình đề nghị, khi viết, các bạn có thể ghi tiếng việt
kế bên từ tiếng Anh mà mình dùng.
That’s all
Bài viết của nguyendieuthuy
my family have four person.They are my parent,brother and me.my morther and my father are
both tercher.My eder borther is a student in university'hochiminh citỵAnd I am elearning in
economy university in Danang.My family are happy and funy.Now,my family have only two
person because I and my eder brother are living away from my familỵBut in the furter,we will
get to gather.We are happy and happy forever
Bài sửa của bluewatergal
my family have four personpeople.They are my parent parents,my brother and me.my
morthermother and my father are both tercher teachers.My ederelder borther is a student in
[s]university'hochiminh citỵ[/S](có phải ý bạn định viết "university in Ho chi minh city ")And I
am elearning learning in economy Economic university in Danang.My family are happy and
funy[color="red"]funny[/COLOR](Ở đây bạn không nên dùng từ "funny"vì từ này mang săc thái
ý nghĩa chê, chế giễu ).Now,my family have only two person people because I and my ederelder
brother are living away from my familỵBut in the furterfuture,we will get to gather.We are
happy and happy forever
comment:
1. Bạn còn sai nhiều lỗi chính tả quá
2. Câu "my mother and my father are both teacher"
Cách dùng từ "both"
both sth and sth
both of whích /them
"them , which " đại diện cho hai vật
nên ở đây bạn phải viết là
Both my mother and my father are teachers
Both my parents are teachers